What is it with this influx of Pg-13??!!!! Personally I blame B, you and that bitch Cali for this. NO! NO! NO!

Now that’ve I’ve had my little tantrum, can I say what a wonderful start, L?

Way too short, but heck, you made up for it in quality, so you are officially let off [ and yes, you can let out that breath of relief now, babes ]

More please….said a half-sated Cordy to a rampant Angel

Sachxx

 Your a riot truly a riot sweetie, can’t wait to see what you come up with next.
This is very good  —–from Kim

 

The start of another Lysa-Fic, great as always and I am looking forward to seeing where you take this challenge.

I had to go read the challenge itself before leaving my FB, so I knew for sure what I was commenting on, I hadn’t remembered seeing this particular challenge on your thread before but then I can barely remember what I did yesterday let alone what I might have read a month or so ago.

Now I do know what the challenge is I am chomping at the bit for some more now!!

Thanks for the final laugh too, it was worth the almost exploding head I got when I started laughing like a demented hyena, garnered me some strange looks from my nephew and parents too who were in the room with me at the time. What made it worse, I couldn’t stop laughing (and groaning) long enough to explain what was so funny.

Despite added headache, I really needed this laugh …

QUOTE

Angel actually laughed, suddenly figuring this might not be as dangerous as Cordelia seemed to believe. “Say that again?”

The shortest of the trio gave his partners in crime a dark look, “I told you we should have come up with a name for it first.” 

… so thank you!!

Lesley-Ann

 

Bwah! The Trio! Just tell me Buffy was in the vision too, because no way they scared Cordelia that much, unless she’s in hyper maternal mode? Hehe.

Or is the unnamed thingy really dangerous?

Can’t wait for more, do we get more before the vacation?

 

OMG, the terrible trio. I don’t think I’ve read a xover fic with them in it. This should be a blast (and not from a “super laser electro-magic thingie”).

I loved Angel’s realizations about his feelings and the tender moment between them. And she didn’t run when he touched her! That’s progress.

What’s this about a vacation and does this mean the fic won’t be finished before you go? Oh, horrors! I don’t think I can go weeks without a fic from you.

Write really fast!

 

Yeah! New serial fic from Lysa!

Lovin’ it already. Need the next part like 5 minutes ago. But hey, no pressure….

Peace,

Mel

 

When Cordelia mentioned the L-word, Angel thought he might jump out of his skin.

Dude, you can’t SAY the L word, you’re not ready to DO the L word. *g*

Trying to figure out what was going on in Angel’s head was like weaving through a maze. The twists and turns were confusing, but for some reason the root of the problem always turned out blond.

Heh. little subtext to go, there?

 

“Not so fast,” the tallest of the three intruders spoke up as Cordelia made an effort to do just that. “We’re here for the kid. According to our internet sources, that baby is worth a fortune. Give him up now and we won’t have to fry you with our… our…”

Picking up where the first guy left off, “Uh, our super laser electro-magic thingie.”

Sacre Bleu! could it be? the….nemiseseses?

More, more, more. What a great opening! So in tune with Angel’s hesitation towards Cordy….great dialogue between them both. natural and very well written.

Lovely, Lysa…now, go write more.

B

YAY!!!!!! Another Lysa fic, in interesting challenge and an x-over with the trio, you have me hooked. Loved the ending it was perfect, in character with the trio and very funny. Can’t wait to read more. Please post again soon.
Nairi

 

OOOO is it the Trio??? I love how those mediocre villains turned out to be a lot more trouble in Sunnydale than anyone would have imagined.

I can’t wait for the next chapter, please don’t keep us waiting too long.

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Lisa Marie

 

Wonderful start Lysa, I so love those three evil villians, they make me smile.

I enjoyed the close sense of family and love between Cordy and Angel and Connor, I so miss that.

Off to read more, sorry for the scrappy feedback but my curiosity will not let me linger.

Hugs

Kat

 

love this think that Lysa has been to Sach and Scorchy’s school of torture lately
from Kim

 

PPPPTTTTTTTTT….damn gypsies. *g*

Ohh. This is good. You wrote this very very well….there was an eerie atmosphere about the fortuneteller that was almost tangible to the reader. Good job, both with ambience of the story and with dialogue. Excellent dialogue.

I am so glad you broke this into chapters. Honey, you got a story to tell here, not a quickfic.

OK. Ready for more now.

B

 

Whoowhoowhoo! Here it is, long awaited [well, a day, *snikker*] Another chapter [and still PG-13, but what can a pressuriser do?].

Okay……. The gypsy KALDERASH! Cool! What a twist, and loved it sooooo much! Her initial reaction then her confusion followed by a leettle, tiny melting- in the end helping out. The advice to Wes; bravo! Let’s hope cannon mistakes are now averted yay!

G/W have it alllll wrong, lol :

*snort*

Gunn’s mistrust- SO Gunn.
Wes’s valid questioning- So Wes
And Fred was a peach, just the way I prefer her.

Was sorta thinking ‘changethecursechangethecurse’ all the way through the gypsy convo when her initial distaste and hatred began to wane on knowing he was now a Warrior for the Light. Ahhh well, *sigh* That’s just me.

Well, read it, absorbed it- most likely will read it again….and now waiting for the next one please

Sachxx

 

I really like, how in both chapters *so far* of this story you have captured such a great sense of atmosphere. First between Angel and Cordy at the Hyperion, and then with the fortuneteller at the carnival. Excellent distinguishing between the two. Very separate and believable scenarios.

And your dialogue is spot on. You’re telling a really interesting story here, and I think your decision to break it into chapters was a good one.

You’re so faboo. This was lovely to wake up to.

B

 

Mmmm, Lysa fic….

I love your writing. Everything you write, I can picture perfectly in my minds eye as if it were happening on the show. Now that my dear is the sign of a talented writer.

So go, write more. Post more. And show the world your talent.

Oh and a little C/A nookie wouldn’t hurt either!

Mel

 

Wonderful chapter, Lysa. You never put anything in a fic that isn’t important, so I’m thinking the gypsy broad will probably play another role down the line.

Let’s hope Wes really paid attention to this tidbit.

Want more now! Are we going to get the whole thing before you leave? Pwease!

 

QUOTE (CalifiST @ Jun 16 2004, 08:14 AM)
Was sorta thinking ‘changethecursechangethecurse’ all the way through the that gypsy convo when her initial ditaste and hatred began to wane on knowing he was now a Warrior for the Light. Ahhh well, *sigh* That’s just me.

Nope Cali, I was right there with you chanting along.

loved the whole fortune telling scene, I thought the characters were spot on and you created a great one out of your gypsy lady.

Amanda

 

Lysa,
Once again this is truly brillant i love each and every single moment of this fic
from Kim

 

That gypsy gave me chills of the good kind. I loved the cryptic way she spoke and all that she saw and said.

I’m loving the time frame of this story, the image of Gunn and Fred and Wes having fun at a carnival gives me a big happy.

I am so hoping that they manage to get back to Angel in time to avert danger, I must be off to see.

Hugs

Kat

 

Quote:
Feedback: Absolutely! Please send some my way. FB keeps my muse happy.

Must keep muse happy, so Lysa will post more! So here it goes….

Love this! Love this! Love this!

Only one little itty bitty thing that I caught that needs to be fixed:

Quote:

“I second that,” Andrew quickly raised his hand to agree. Somehow he’d drawn the short straw in being assigned to baby-sitting duties. Being an only-child had not exactly given him experience when it came to squalling infants.

Um, I think Andrew has an older brother called Tucker, right?

Other than that, itty bitty, miniscule little thing, this fic is perfect.

So now, go forth and write! And than post…..like NOW!

Luvs,

Mel

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CIERRA:

 

Ogh god, oh god! Thank God we know what’s happened to Angel otherwise I’d be wiling and beating my little chest now!

And naughty Jonathon needs a smack- I won’t even go there where Andrew comes in….and never liked Warren ick.

Cliffhangery and that will get you a smack too!

 

NOooooo. You can’t go on vacation and leave us hanging on this fic. That’s just sooooo mean. *sniff*

It’s only a few days, right? You’re not gone for like 2 weeks or anything. Right? I’m beginning to tremble with fear and feeling a little woozy. I can’t go through the withdrawal. Please don’t leave us!

I don’t think I can…feedback not possible… *faint*

Umm, I’m completely clueless as to where Angel went. I never watched BtVS so even though I sorta know who these guys are I have no idea what there thingamajig does. So at least you have one suspended reader.

Oh and Cali I absolutely adore the ficpic. The pic of the three is hilarious from just their facial expressions, and I love how it adds a burst of color to the piece. Great job.

And Lysa you are the queen of incorporating characters in a new way, and this time is no exception. Love it!

Amanda

 

Wonder whats happened to Angel cause i don’t think that his dead but hmmm

love this love this so much
from Kim

 

Oh no, Angel got vaporized Hope you have a way around that!
I just love the mamabear vibe Cordy’s giving off. You write her so well.
This is really a good read!
Anna

 

I had some good laughs while reading this, Lysa!!! I’m really enjoying this fic!! Hope you post more ASAP!!

 

LYSA!!!! I love it.
Wow, you think Willow tortured the geeks? I’m certain that Angel can do much much worse! More soon please.

 

Lysa,
Once again a brillant fic and can’t wait for more
from Kim

 

Lysa –

Again darlin you brightened a rather rough day for me! I love this fic and want more more more.

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LISAMARIE14:

I love invisible Angel…and wonder what he is going to do to the geeks once he gets a hold of them.

Great job so far!

__________________
Lisa Marie

 

holy cow, you have Warren down to a T.

“Know thy enemy,” quoted Warren. “Or as the Klingons say—”

Stop it. Stop it right now. *g*

Invisible Angel driving. Heh.

Wonderful chapter, Lysa. You really really drew perfect portrayals of the three nerds, and made them distinct. Calm, collected, thinking Cordy. Gotta love her.

B

 

I was gonna say too short, but as you are posting away from the home fires, L, I will let you off, lol.

The funniest part I think was Fred touching Angel’s shoe, he he, dont know why! just tickles me.

Cannot wait to see what happenes when they get to SD. so funny and hoping Jonathon let’s his conscience rule a bit in the end.
More please babes

Saxhxx

 

Lysa,
I forgive you for the shortness as your still away, but girl this rocks it’s nice to see something else and am thinking that we get a good suprise soon very good one.
From Kim

 

Great job Lysa, loved it. I love the geeks and their geekmobile, they are so cute and earnest and amusing about evil. They try so hard, go little geeks. Well except for Warren who is just eew and bad. I love the way you wrote Jonathon.

Good to see Cordy keeping her head on straight, thinking through possibilities, getting all the information she can, she is the perfect person to be with Connor.

Got to love invisible Angel. Funny. And Lorne with the ‘there’s something different about you’ just cracked me up.

Can’t wait for more. Hope that you are having fun.

Big hugs

Kat

 

Lysa!

Loved this part, too. Angel & the gang were pretty funny with the invisibility thing, and I liked how everything Angel touched became invisible, too. Neat way to do it.

Can’t wait to have them head to sunny-d for the rest of the story!

Keep it coming!

Julie

 

I guess you’re not just lounging by the pool, huh? I knew you couldn’t leave us completely. You sad, sad woman.

QUOTE
“Know thy enemy,” quoted Warren. “Or as the Klingons say—”

“Nobody cares what they say,” Cordelia huffed.

and

QUOTE
Changing the subject, Jonathan told her, “I’m still into magick, too. Not like Willow, but I can work some major mojo.”

“That explains a lot,” Cordelia leaned her head back against the cabinet. “I once got a freaky card in the mail from Anya. She told me she was considering letting me have Xander back because he just couldn’t compete with you. Something about you being the one man every woman wants. A couple of days later she left a message on our voice mail telling me to forget it.”

LMAO!! The whole scene with the geeks and Cordy was a hoot. I think Cordy’s going to end up as the leader before they know it.

I’m so relieved someone knows Angel’s invisible and nice side effect of being able to be in the sun. I especially loved the part where Fred thought Angel was a kitten and called for the kitty. What a great visual.

I do have a question of clarification, however. In the show, the trio knew they were making people invisible and not killing them. Have you changed that in this story? Do they think they’ve killed Angel or are they just not telling Cordy he’s not dead to keep her in the dark?

Great chapter, Lysa. Come home soon and post a bunch more!

 

QUOTE (DamnSkippy @ Jun 22 2004, 09:31 AM)
I do have a question of clarification, however. In the show, the trio knew they were making people invisible and not killing them. Have you changed that in this story? Do they think they’ve killed Angel or are they just not telling Cordy he’s not dead to keep her in the dark?

First off…the lake is freezing. I’ve come to the coldest spot in the US outside of Alaska. For a Texas gal who wore shorts all the way up here, let’s just say I’m freezing my ass off, but having a great time doing it.

Clarifications:
Since you may not get any more of this story until I get back (I had most of this written before leaving home 5 days ago), I’ll give you a little scoop on the electro-magic thingy.

The trio has no idea that they’ve created an invisibility device. They were just shooting for a space-gun laser and it looks like they have a few bugs to work out before they discover what it can really do. So basically, they think they’ve vaporized Angel and have zero clue they’re about to become targets.

Now I get the fun of figuring out what the heck happens next. How long does Angel stay invisible & what happens then? Do the geeks get away or are they captured? And where does Madame Bosha and the Eye of Dakronn fit in?

Ok…so maybe I already have that figured out for the most part, but finding time to write it may have to wait for the drive back home.

Write lots while I’m gone!

 

Lysa,

Nice story! I’m just hoping the the 3 nerds get their butts kicked but good — I’ve always absolutely hated them. And I have to laugh at Fred’s reaction to figuring out Angel’s seeming invisibility. Looking forward to the next part!

 

I gotta say, you’ve got very distinct characters here, and you’ve given them unique voice within your narrative. Especially the nemiseseseseses…………you’ve captured each one through out the story so far. You gave Warren just that right touch of amorality mixed with smarminess. Good job. Very good twist, having them all end up in Sunnydale. Ain’t too proud to beg here, sweet baby. Need more.

B

 

Lysa updated oh that puts joy into a girl’s heart that’s for sure lol.
Love this and can’t wait to see what happens next this is good very good
from Kim

 

Oh Lysa —

Love this fic so much. I got up earlier before leaving for work to see if something was posted, and imagine my excitement seeing your post.

I love how this fic is developing; you have really done a good job characterizing Warren, Jonathan and Andrew. I can see everything I am reading, right down to the Luke Skywalker action figures.

Can’t wait to see more, and can’t wait to see Buffy’s reaction to Inviso!Angel.

 

Hurry up Angelllll!!!! *gasp* Hate Warren *shudder*

And you call this a longer post?? Are you kidding me??? When I said longer, I meant the whole fic, duh! *snikker*

Wonderful pace, gripping and found the B/D cool. Hands off Buff! lol.

Angel had better not get too used to being around in the sunlight, heh, as he might forget himself.

Andrew needs a slap and I can’t help but shake my head at Jonathon; will her ever learn?

Sheesh.

More please or I will just have to hound you- and you know how much you love that, LM
Sachxx

 

Thank baby Jesus you’re back.

Love, love, love the Dawn phone bit. She’s such a little brat. Angel’s reaction was perfect.

I also thought this interaction with Buffy was brilliant. I could hear the desperation in his voice and glad she responded in the slayer-to-the-rescue way.

QUOTE
Then Buffy was left to draw her own conclusions about Cordelia’s place in his life as emotion welled up so that the words were choked off, “If anything happens…”

Even as her unshed tears burned in her eyes, Buffy realized she’d never heard Angel speak about anything with that sound in his voice. Not when he told her he loved her, or when he gave her the Claddagh ring or even when they put an end to their relationship. She didn’t like hearing the hurt, the fear or the helplessness sounding along with feelings of love that were supposed to be reserved for her.

Angel loved his son and he obviously cared for Cordelia. Something had happened to prompt this phone call. It wasn’t like Angel to call her out of the blue and he’d said that it was urgent. So Buffy wiped away the tears glistening in her eyes and asked, “What’s the trouble?”

“There’s a price on Connor’s head,” Angel explained. “Ever since his birth we’ve been fighting off one group or another bound to capture or kill him, humans and demons.”

Shifting out of jealous ex-girlfriend mode, Buffy put her Slayer cap on. Nodding her understanding and concluding that something had happened to both Cordelia and Connor, she spoke into the phone, “So how can I help?”

I fell out of my chair at this:

Good to see the guys haven’t forgotten their basic math. Buffy = Sex Bunny. LMAO!!

I hope you got very well rested because I expect the next parts very quickly.

 

love it, Lysa! So glad to see more.

__________________
Jules

 

Hey Lysa

The muse is well rested I see and obviously raring to go. There wasn’t a line of this I didn’t like right from the FG in the angelmobile, Angels conversation with Buffy and the crowning moment of Buffy jumping to assumptions and trying to cover it up (I really liked your Buffy btw).

I have to say I’m no expert on BTVS S6 (was it?) but from the eps I did catch you have the terrible trio off to a ‘T’ and it makes this whole scenario so much more creepy knowing those three could accidentally cock things up without even trying!

But Cordy is just the star in this, hot damn what a leading lady and so damn right for Angel (ugh, don’t get me side tracked lol). I can’t wait for the showdown but knowing you your gonna tease me right???

Huggles, Helen

 

Called by many names
Soaring to heights unmeasured
Bolstered by dreams

Enlightened by pain
Out of the gloom of despair
Truth clouded no more

Destiny or chance
Bounding to its pinnacle
To be acknowledged 

Have been meaning to ask…is this your verse, or from another source? It is lovely, and have been enjoying the verse at the beginning of each chapter.

Buffy = Sex Bunny.

heh

And you gave Warren just the right edge…he was a smarmy bottom dweller, but dangerous in his right. Keep it comin’, sweets.

B

 

Lysa this was great. I loved your Buffy, she really has changed and I just really respected her in this part, there was the whole wanting Angel to pine forever bit, but it was balanced with her realisation that she could move on so why shouldn’t he. Brilliant, I like a mature slayer.

Warren is really bugging me, eew he touched Cordy and is having lascivious thoughts about her, eew eew eew. I can’t wait for invisible Angel to come rushing to the rescue, and I wouldn’t mind Buffy smacking those three either. LOL.

Great job.

Hugs

Kat

 

 

Great chapter. Things are heating up.

You know what I’m going to quote…

QUOTE
“We’ve got to get our stuff. Who knows when it will be safe to come back,” Warren explained.

“I’ll grab the video games and you get the magazines,” suggested Andrew as he ran down the basement steps ahead of Jonathan.

Warren called down to them, “I meant the important stuff.”

“Oh, right. Got it. Autographed scripts and mint condition comic books only,” nodded Jonathan as he moved toward the safe holding their most precious possessions.

ROTFLMAO! You’ve so got these guys down. And I loved your Spike/Buffy interaction.

Need more now!!

 

And the action heats up!

Especially loved this:

Quote:

Snorting with laughter, Spike grabbed the opportunity to poke a little fun at his old grandsire. “So that’s his problem. Curse finally getting to him. Figures he can use a little love’bot of his own.”

“Shut. Up. Spike,” she gritted her teeth and barely restrained the urge to go after him again. Reminders of the Buffybot and its primary protocol were not exactly in his favor.

Then his voice softened, those blue eyes intent upon hers, “Doesn’t compare to the real thing, luv.”

and this:

Quote:

“We’ve got to get our stuff. Who knows when it will be safe to come back,” Warren explained.

“I’ll grab the video games and you get the magazines,” suggested Andrew as he ran down the basement steps ahead of Jonathan.

Warren called down to them, “I meant the important stuff.”

“Oh, right. Got it. Autographed scripts and mint condition comic books only,”

too funny! Can’t wait for the next part.

 

*mutter* Debs always grabs the quote I want *mutter*

Oh, well, I am gonna quote the rest of the chapter…..as it is SO SHORT I could do that, couldn’t I, Lysa? *bats eyelashes innocently*

Come ON! I know you wanted to cut down on the size of your chapters, but this is……

I was just getting into it and it suddenly ended and I wanted to kill something; but everyone was out so I couldn’t

Delish as always, L, and I loved the trio parts a LOT. Warren still comes out creepy even though he is also a nerd, so kudos to you. The only criticism I have is the length; think you need to work on that, sweets. muwahahahahaha…… *runs away quick*

 

Another great chapter Lysa. Dawn was perfect in this. You’ve captured her brattiness perfectly, and I like how she views Angel, very true to life, she was always on the side of Spike.

QUOTE
Wide eyes staring, she decided she liked him a lot better this way. “Cool, you really are invisible.”

LMAO.

I love the way the trio rushed to pack and leave, so cute, they make me laugh.

I am hanging out to see what happens next. I love this fic, makes me smile each time I see a part of it up.

Hugs

Kat

 

Lysa,
Debs is right you really captured the essences of the trio LOL. now it’s going me wondering who she is hmmm oh this is good so very very good
from Kim

 

Lysa –

Well I too would love to quote this entire fic, but for now I will settle with my two favorite parts.
Loved it all, many many times over! Especially like Dawn’s comment to Angel regarding letting him into the house. It must have burned him to hear other vampires were allowed to roam about.

QUOTE (Lysa @ Jun 29 2004, 11:50 AM)
“C’mon in, Angel. It’s not like you’ll be the only vampire with free access to the house.”

Also loved the dialog with the Trio regarding the Inviso ray, are the nerds whispering in your ear for this one???

QUOTE (Lysa @ Jun 29 2004, 11:50 AM)
Warren laughed at their confusion, explaining, “We’ve got an invisibility ray.”

“Cool,” Jonathan gasped as he bent down to touch the evidence of the broken clay pot and the soft flower petals now invisible to his eyes.

“Cool,” Andrew’s response came at the same time. “That’s way better than just a Destructo Ray.”

In total agreement, Warren had to add, “Just think of what we can do now.”

“Cool.”

“Cool.”

Good Stuff…Can’t wait for more of course!

LM

 

Hee Hee, “You guys are so gonna get your asses kicked” and them some. Loved the way they reacted to realizing Angel isn’t dustovamp! Loved Buffy once again (Wow two for two) but Dawns bugging me just like she’s s’posed too *wink*.

But that’s just me and my huge favoritism for Angel over Spike.

Can’t wait for the next installment Hun.

Huggles, Helen

 

Another great part Lysa, you had me giggling all through it, love the reaction of the scoobs to invisible Angel.

Just think of all the mischief he could get up to in that state…..

More soon please..

 

Hey Lysa I was wondering if you could lay down some serious sexual stuff between Cordy and a invisible Angle. Kind of like what happen with buffy and spike only wayyyy better, Plz.
Great fic so far (as always) plz post more

 

Cordelia’s Destiny already posted my favorite quote, the wench. I think I’ve dated those guys at one time or another, and that’s just sad.

This is a good fic, and I like the way the whole ensemble is coming together.

It would have been interesting to see Angel interact with Dawn. You give us a very possible glimpse.

More. And I mean it.

B

 

Lysa,
This is brillant and i love that i can see it now.
oh can’t wait for more this is great, and the geek hanging suspended in mid air of good very good
from Kim

 

Thanks for the FB, Kim. Don’t forget that when I’m posting here, it gives you a chance to give me some constructive FB, especially if there is some glaring plot point you hate. Your opportunity to kick *my* ass a little, lol.

Glad you liked it.

Not sure how much writing I’ll get done over the next few days as it’s the 4th of July Weekend.

 

Wow! And why isn’t this posted elsewhere, hmm?

Wonderful- woooonderrrful! Always love it when the ideas are all put together so perfectly. 😎

Gimme more, you little terror, grrrr 😉

Sachxx wubs

 

LOL. Thanks!

It’s just posted here because it’s supposed a preview for you nutcases to critique and tell me if I need to fix anything.

I remembered one thing…the ray gun. I didn’t mention it when Willow & Jonathan were standing in the garage together, so I’ve added that in. Figure I’ll wait until later today in case anyone comes up with something glaring. If not, I’ll post the chapter.

I’m gonna have to venture off and find chapters 1-7. This is wonderful!

Thanks!
C

 

Yeah, Cammy, it does help to read parts 1-7 first, lol. It might explain a few things about what’s going on.*wink*

Thanks for taking a peek.

 

Lysa, I think you did a fine job with the action. While I was reading it, though, what bothered me was the lack of Angel rescuing Connor. He disappeared and then he’s holding Andrew up in the air after Warren is defeated.

First, how did that happen? Wasn’t Andrew taking Connor to the van in the garage? I expected Andrew to be in the van when Warren hopped into it. What made him go outside instead to be captured by Angel?

Secondly, if for whatever reason he did go outside, in my mind, it probably would have taken him 2 seconds to grab Connor from Andrew (the sissy boy), knocked him out and then gone back for Cordy. It just seemed odd that while Warren was getting away (which felt like it would’ve taken quite a bit of time), Angel was outside just holding Andrew up that whole time with no concern for Cordy’s situation. Perhaps the FG can show up a little sooner and Angel can give Connor to Fred to hold while he and Buffy go after Warren.

That’s the only thing that bothered me and feel free to ignore me. Ya know I love ya! :hugs:

 

Thank you, Deb! This is the kind of discussion I was looking for.

I thought I had made it clear that Andrew escaped out the back instead of going to the garage, so I guess I need to clarify that & possibly explain why he chose to go that route instead of going to the van.

To be honest, I was grumbling over Angel not helping with Warren’s capture, but I figured that Connor had to be a priority. I’ll go back and add in the Andrew/Angel scene.

The FG had to come from across town, so the timing for their arrival is actually a little sooner than it should be rather than later, especially since Xander had to pick up Fred & Gunn who were on foot.

Do you think Andrew spends enough time in the lair to be able to get Angel into the house with an invitation? Technically, he doesn’t live there, but if some of his most precious belongings are there and he spends tons of time there, I might be able to get around that rule.

If Angel can get in the house, then he can hand the baby to Willow, take care of Jonathan & Andrew and then try to find Cordelia. Of course, this still leaves Warren’s capture for Buffy.

Hmmm…

 

I thought I had made it clear that Andrew escaped out the back instead of going to the garage, so I guess I need to clarify that & possibly explain why he chose to go that route instead of going to the van.

I guess I didn’t know “out the back” was different from going into the garage. 🙂 Or maybe I just assumed he’d want to make a quick escape in a vehicle rather than running around town on foot with a screaming baby. So, yeah, I think a reason for him going outside would help. Maybe they have an alternate “safe house” (other than their own homes) like a bat cave that he’s going to get to.

I agree Connor is Angel’s priority. But, as I said, he could take care of Andrew is 2 seconds even tracking him easily if he managed to get a head start. In my mind, Invisible!Angel is standing outside the back door and Andrew just runs into him. Angel grabs Connor before Andrew hits the dirt. 😉 Ok, maybe not that easy, but as dumb as Andrew is and with Angel invisible, it could happen.

The question of Andrew able to issue an invite is iffy. I’d say no, since it’s Warren’s house. I think they just meet there, like a club house, and he goes to his house every night. So I don’t think he can get in the house.

But once he has Connor he wouldn’t put him in further danger, IMO, by going straight back in for Cordy anyway. There’d have to be someone to watch him. Maybe he goes back around and sees Willow is still staving with Warren and Jonathan and decides to head toward where the Scoobs will be coming from to intercept. Then he can hand off Connor and they see Warren speeding off in the van. Maybe he goes after Warren (since he still can’t get in the house) and Buffy goes to help Willow with Jonathan.

As far as the Scoobs being far away and gettin their too fast, I agree it’s a problem. Maybe they can say they were already on their way toward Warren’s since the other places weren’t checking out. Convenient but makes sense.

ETA: In order to get the Scoobs there a little faster, you could have Angel do the phoning or give Willow the phone as soon as he tells her they’re all there at Warren’s. He could hand her the phone and tell her to get them there while he goes and scopes out how the house is set up and sniffs out where exactly they are in the house. That way, too, he’d know all the exits. Then he gets back and talks to Willow about doing an invite spell.

 

I appreciate you putting so much thought into this, Deb. It has given me some ideas…dunno if they’re any good, but at least they’re ideas.

During my original planning stage, I had totally forgotten the fact that Angel needed an invitation since the lair was at Warren’s house. Then I had Willow tagging along thinking…aha!…she can use magick. Then I tried to match up where this story took place during BtVS and realized this was the period of time where she was not using her magick because of her addiction to it.

I’m feeling as frustrated as Angel in not being able to get him into the house. LOL. Anyhoo, I’ve given Andrew a reason to head out the back door instead of go directly for the garage. I’m also giving him a little delay before Angel gets to him and I figure Angel might be desperate enough to see if Andrew can get him inside the house with an invitation. Which won’t work.

That leaves Angel going back to the front in time for F & G to arrive with X & A. Think I’ll let them get out of the car before Warren actually takes off from the garage. Angel can do the baby hand-off with Fred. Xander can run in after Willow. Hmmm…that’ll leave Anya guarding Andrew. LOL. Angel is about to tell Gunn to go in after Cordy when the van bursts through the garage door & takes off down the street. Gunn & Angel follow on foot, but the van is too far ahead, so they end up jumping into the Plymouth which was parked 3 houses down. Buffy gets there first, but Angel does something dangerously acrobatic to get on-board. Warren is captured & when they return it is to find the others gathered around Cordelia in the garage.

Grrr! Now I remember why I prefer to write smut.

 

Yes but smut is what you’re good at and Debs kicking your butt is a good thing.
After all you kick mine and Chrissy’s butts all the time.
The one thing that i love about this is how you’ve got Angel almost admitting that he loves Cordy. How he wants to protect not only his son but also Cordy. That he wants to keep them from harm, and to make sure who ever hurts them pays.
Also the cliff hanger ending works perfect, leave the reader wanting more, but also leave the option open for stalking.
And it’s been a while since you’ve been stalked lol
from Kim

 

Yes, Deb kicking my butt *is* a good thing. Fair play for all, I say. LOL.
I just posted the update here on my LJ if you want to take a look, otherwise I’ll probably post it at AO & ST later tonight or maybe tomorrow before I head off to my 4th of July Barbecue.

 

I really liked the other chapter, but you’ve really, really cleaned it up well….the action plays out a lot smoother and flows quite well. The get angel into the house thing is much better, too. This is a really good chapter, hon. Post soon.

B

 

Yeah have to agree with B, you really cleaned this one up and it shows.
You can really feel the angst and heartache that is going through willow about not being able to help.
The Anya thing works so very well, the way his her prisoner i am sure that she liked that.
Angel handing Fred the carrier his most precious thing and going after the guys that took his family.
The fallen seer cliff hanger ending works so well, it gives you that look into the heartache of others.
from Kim

 

Lysa,

You really cleaned this fic up and it show, you worked well with the advice given.

QUOTE
Looking paler than normal, Willow gulped down hard as she realized Angel couldn’t get in the house and there was no way she could help him do it. “Uh… no. Actually, um, I’m kinda not doing the magick thing for a while.”

Confused at Willow’s refusal, Angel didn’t know what to think, his anger at the three kidnappers unintentionally turning on her, “You’re a powerful wicca. I’ve seen you jump into a fight to help Buffy when you had nothing more than a desire to help. This is Cordy. This is my son. Willow, you can end this here and now.”

Wide-eyed and trembling from her own inner struggle, Willow admitted that it would be easy to let go and do what he asked. “I want too. Really. But I can’t do it.”

“The hell you can’t!” Willow jumped as the oak tree creaked; bark flying off of one spot as Angel’s invisible fist connected hard. She’d never known Angel to lose his temper; he was always subdued and in control. “If you can bring Buffy back from the dead, you can damn well get me in that door.”

Even if she couldn’t see his face, Willow knew this went far beyond anger. “You don’t understand.” He’d dragged her along assuming that she had the power to get him inside knowing that she possessed the ability to invoke magick that could counter any scientific
traps that might be in their way. To help him save…

You can really feel the angst and heartache that is going through willow about not being able to help.

QUOTE
“My son and the woman I—,” Angel broke off at the startled look in Willow’s eyes as she dragged her gaze away to stare at her shoes. His thoughts echoed hers, though neither one confirmed it. Just the direction his words were taking forced Angel to refocus and demand an explanation, “Just give me one good reason.

This whole part is my fav part, you almost had the clueless wonder admiting it for us to hear.

QUOTE
Hello, I am Anya,” the blonde smiled down at Andrew appearing quite cordial. “You are now my prisoner and will refrain from any attempt at escaping.”

On the ground, crawling up to his hands and knees, Andrew glanced toward the road and calculated his chances of outrunning a woman wearing sandals. He’d barely even conceived of the notion when Anya’s smile turned into a frown. Stomping on his sore hand, she then dug her heel into his back, “Stay down, you little pipsqueak.”

The Anya thing works so very well, the way he’s her prisoner I am sure that she liked that.

Angel handing Fred the carrier his most precious thing and going after the guys that took his family.
The fallen seer cliff hanger ending works so well, it gives you that look into the heartache of others.

Can’t wait for more, now see leaving us on a cliff hanger might work well. But Sweetie it means that my stalking nature comes out.
Although i better not stalk at least till i send you new fixing mistakes

from Kim

 

Excellent action! It really worked so well with the changes. My heart was pounding and I was laughing at the same time.

QUOTE
Pulling Cordelia in front of him as a shield despite her struggles, Warren watched as Andrew darted toward the back door. “Not that way, moron,” he called out as their things were all in the van.

“Plan C,” Andrew yelled back over his shoulder as days of strategic planning finally kicked in.

“Idiot,” muttered Warren…

LOL! At least they had a plan C no matter how stupid it may have been.

QUOTE
The thought of turning these weasels… aww that could be cute… into rats was very tempting.

Nice to see a true Willow moment here.

QUOTE
“C’mon, little vampire baby,”

I know a lot of people don’t like Andrew, but I did adore him. I love this line!! LOL!

QUOTE
“Hello, I am Anya,” the blonde smiled down at Andrew appearing quite cordial. “You are now my prisoner and will refrain from any attempt at escaping.”

You gave everyone something in this chapter and this is pure Anya. Again, LMAO!

QUOTE
Rasping thickly, “Bring her to me.”

This just about killed me. Gah! I can just hear the pain in those words.

I know how hard this chapter was, but you pulled it off brilliantly!

Now get on with what happens to Cordy and how do we make Angel visible again!

 

Re: Hi There

I know this is long over due but i just wanted to say thank you for all your help. I love reading your fics over and over. Keep going at them. Thank you alot.

Love it love it love it. I am all choked up right now with Cordy laying close to death in that garage and Angel unable to get to her.I really loved Anya’s line about Andrew being her prisoner.

Such good stuff, so glad I took a break from family stuff to check ST to see if there were any additions to this great story.

Look forward to more soon
LM

 

Playing catch up with this one, Lysa. I haven’t had time to read it before now.

You have me so caught up in the story – I just can’t wait to see what happens next. The whole thing is playing out like a real episode of the series.

QUOTE
“C’mon, little vampire baby,”

This was so totally Andrew – you have all the characterizations spot on.

QUOTE
Buffy’s arrival with Warren went unnoticed as everyone was focused on the form of the fallen seer and the tormented voice of the invisible vampire. They didn’t need to see Angel to understand his feelings because they resonated from him with every syllable he uttered. Propelling Gunn that final step into the garage, Angel stayed as close as he could get. Rasping thickly, “Bring her to me.”

Hope Cordy doesn’t meet the same fate as that poor girl in the real Buffy episode.

Hope you post some more very soon.

Hugs Becky

 

QUOTE
Propelling Gunn that final step into the garage, Angel stayed as close as he could get. Rasping thickly, “Bring her to me.”

That bit says it all

Lysa, so love this fic and can’t wait for the rest. You go on about the ‘shuddering’ when you do action scenes, but I wish I could manage them half as well.

Wonderful, loved it- and want more please

Sachxx

 

Lysa, I’ve been having computer trouble for a few weeks or I would have already left feedback for this fantastic fic.

You packed so much emotion and action into this chapter that I’m overwhelmed. All of that and you still managed to throw in humor. You are a woman of many talents and aren’t we the lucky readers for it? *grin*

I can’t wait to see how this resolves (I can’t say ends because I’m not ready for that yet, this is just too good). There are so many unanswered questions. Will Cordy be all right? Will Angel become visible again? Will the three villains get what is coming to them? Will Cordy and Angel tell each other about their recently realized feelings for each other? I know I sound like a bad soap opera announcer, but enquiring minds really do need to know, so please post again soon.

__________________
Sammie

 

I read this last night at Angel’s Oasis and didn’t get a chance to reply until today, but I just want to tell you want an amazing job you did on this chapter and the whole story! I was literally on the edge of my seat the whole time I was reading this chapter. Not only that but you’ve got me yelling at my computer for Angel to go back to the house or for Willow to just suck it up and use some magic to save Connor and Cordy! And finally you’ve got me about to cry for Angel because Cordy’s hurt and he can’t get to her.

I really hope you post more soon because I’m about to go crazy to see how Cordy is. Oh, and Warren really needs to be punished severely for being the giant scumbag that he is, so I can’t wait to see what’s coming to him. lol

 

This story just gets better and better with each chapter. I love the way the scene at Warren’s house…the lair…*g*…played out. You created tension and purpose for so many characters at one time, and I still haven’t mastered that yet. Really good continuity. I’m in awe, as always at your adept handling of Warren’s fine line between goofy and creepy.

Now, I need ch. 9. Now.

B

 

LYSSAAAA!
*whine* how could you leave it there! This is really good. More now.
Thanks!

 

Lysa

I’m with Cali it is short but its a great place to leave us hanging *grumble*. Now onto the FB, very funny chapter *snort* invisible Angel and Lorne what a conversation, a rich topic for the host with the most comebacks!

Like I said in 3 I’m not worried about Conner with Cordy there with him and Jonothan was just soooo Jonothan once again (hate Warren little squit).

Loved the last line, what is about the Angelmobile!!

Can’t wait for the next instalment babes

BFSH, Helen

 

Lysa,

Holy freakin hell, I love it when Angel and Willow team up, especially magically Willow and definitely as opposed to Buff!

Wonderfully written action sequences with everything flowing brilliantly mixed in with emotions on Cordy and Angel’s part as well as others.

No idea what clean up means so I’ll simply go with my own feelings and say wonderful stuff and can’t wait for more!!! *hint hint* I need to know what happens when Angel catches us with Cordy but I’m glad Conner’s safe with Fred and I know Gunn will keep Angel grounded or maybe not *snicker* since they both have a habit of overreacting when a loved one is threatened LOL.

Hugz’n’smooches, Helen

 

Just reread this…somehow, can just picture Andrew…”c’mon, little baby vampire.” hee

I so love this, Lysa. The entire sequence at the house played out so well, you did a great job of juggling several characters through a scene in which a lot happened. Good job. Warren, he is the toast boy now. *g*

More please. And i would like it if you found a way to write the nerdy trio into another angel story. You do them great.

B

 

Buffy decided she needed to lighten things up just a little. She didn’t like hearing Angel make comments that sounded like they were coming from Angelus

You caught well the fact that Buffy always separated Angel from Angelus…never accepted that both existed together. Part of the problem with B/A.

“Exactly,” Cordelia nodded her head. “I wanna feel what I’m not seeing.”

Ahhh….Cordy logic. You write it well.

 

“Not unless they want their entire mint condition Star Wars Action Figure collection destroyed,” an evil grin spread across Spike’s face. “I’ll be holding it as collateral.”

Is that a shout out?

 

“Thank you again for doing what you did for Connor.” The depth of his sincerity sounded as he added, “As heroes go, you’re mine.”

That was so elegantly expressed. A lovely moment for Angel to admit that.

Ok….this was just faboo. Meant mainly as exposition, it transitioned between scenes well, and managed to deal nicely with the Buffy/Angel dynamic and how it has shifted, further Buffy and Spike’s relationship in a realistic way, and bring Cordy forward as an equal to the group as a whole instead of a bystander. Very very well done.

And then you smack us upside the head at the end. Great job. Just when you thought it was safe to boink the vamp…….*g*

This is an exceptional chapter, hon. You seem to be pouring your heart into this one. And, as I have been from the start, I’m so impressed with your character juggling skills. Nicely done, for such a large ensemble piece.

B

 

Sorry, Lysa, but I had a Margarita tonight and I’m too buzzed to give coherent feedback, so I’ll just say a rousing WORD to what the overly-intellectualized, non-invisiblized Nickle said.

Get a clue, Cordy! He kissed you, you felt him up…that was an invitation to sex!

Speaking of sex, I wouldn’t mind some in the next chapter. Even invisible sex would do, I’m not too picky.

 

Yay you posted and with only way day to wait. Loved Gun in this especially how he protected Cordy and Angel, only to hold up his hands and admit she could but just keep it business, awww now I love Gunn too!

Buffy again was pretty easy to read as well even with the hints of their past but then they were gentle hints and Angel was pretty quick on cutting that off in a nice way.

Willow’s little nuggets had me grinning as always and even Anya with her baby cravings but the stars were of course Angel and Cordy. I loved the quick feel up in the hospital after she forced him by sheet willpower laying up in her hospital bed to turn the light on!

Oooh potentially blood thirsty Angel waiting to hear from Cordy gave me some tingles too but as for that last little cliffhanger…!!

Eevil, evil woman you *sulk* I hope your typing Part 10 as we speak??????

Helen

 

Yeah, Lysa posted! Good thing too, cause I was about to go into stalker mode.

You absolutely made my morning! It’s so nice to sit down with a cuppa of cocoa and a good story. Just makes the whole day not suck, you know?

Anywho, you MUST post the next part much faster, cause you know as B so eloquently put it, we must have vamp boinkage, especially since you write it so well.

Mel

 

Lysa,
As Someone that has seen this from the first draft of this part, to the last draft i know how much you’ve changed and how well it’s worked.
Guess the early looks have helped you get honest feedback.
Can’t wait till the rest of this comes alive, because knowing you sweetie you plan to give us something brilliant.
And i know that Deb loves you for this, for making a serial fic out of her challenge. and can’t wait for the rest
from Kim

 

I just cannot not believe you left it there!!! You better come back with another part very very soon.

niquole

 

There???

You leave it there???

You are evil woman.

Does this mean we get invisible porn? I mean smut?

Love it.
Cat

 

Jumping up and down chanting:

more

more

More

MORE
MORE!!!
LOVE IT

__________________
Lisa Marie

 

Aaaaargh!

I did all this wonderful fb on the drooling of Angel’s thigh and why-oh-why did she stop there? lol

Mentioned how you highlighted the growth of Angel and the fact that Buffy still needs to get there herself- but in a none-bashy way. That I read the critique and wasn’t that hot on peeps saying you should lengthen the B/A scene a bit more- cos, hello? C/A fic here. When B/Aers do the same in their fics, mebbe so [end of vent]

Too much to quote, but the thigh stroking is top of my list

the barely-there kiss and her reaction it it. his hovering too *sigh*

And then my bloody lappy rebooted and I lost the lot- and my original fb was much more eloquent too *sniffle*

Know you have been so busy, but more would be lapped up like a starving woofter…and so sad there is only one more to go *whine*

Thanks for posting, my sweet. Big :wub:

Sachxxx

 

QUOTE (Kimmers @ Jul 16 2004, 08:49 AM)
And I know that Debs loves you for this, for making a serial fic out of her challenge. and can’t wait for the rest
from Kim

While it’s true I do love Lysa for this and many things, this is Julie’s challenge not mine. Mine is still a few fics away and I’m already drooling.

 

Umm Lysa, great part, lovely feelings developing between A/C. Buffy getting the message at last.

Are we in for some invisible smut next?? We don’t mind if you have to up the rating..

I hope Angel’s not going to disintegrate, like Buffy was about to when Willow fixed her.

More soon please.

 

Lysa, this chapter is just fantastic. Completely agree with everyone who has mentioned your wonderful characterizations. They said it much better than I ever could. I love where this is going and the journey it’s taken to get here.

Also really enjoyed the glaring differences between the L.A. group and the Scoobies. Loved the fact that Gunn doesn’t immediately jump (or at all, for that matter) when Buffy makes a decision. The dynamics and hierarchy of each group is so distinct and doesn’t mesh well, but it’s fun to watch the fireworks (in a manner of speaking *LOL*).

Can’t wait to find out what it’s in the letter Madame Bosha left for Angelus and if Angel gets to become visible with his soul intact and anchored so please post again soon.

__________________
Sammie

 

Lysa,

I love this story, and waahh cant believe you left it there you evil Lysa …… only joshing you’re not evil well not totally anyway.

Are we going to have some more soon.

Marie

 

QUOTE
Buffy stalked directly up to the six-foot-five Gunn, looked him straight in the eye even though she had to tilt her head back to do it,

Could just picture that happening, & Gunn not being at all impressed with Buffy throwing her weight around.

Warm fuzzies from the C/A hospital scene and this had me LMAO:

QUOTE
Letting out a little laugh, Cordelia told her, “That was me just talking to my invisible friend.”

Cordy’s ‘Madame Botox’ comment was hilarious too, but Lysa *whine*-you are a very naughty to leave it where you did. Make sure you post Part 10 very soon.

Hugs Becky

 

WOW Lysa! This is brilliant, I was going to wait until it was finished before reading it but just couldn’t do it. Loved the way you mixed humor with action and a lot of feelings and used the original story to deliver an amazing fic, and now I can’t wait to read the next part, please post again soon.
Nairi

 

Lysa ,
What a perfect end to the challenge I am sure that she’ll love it.
You really have grasped the concept of what was wanted.
The comic nature along with the serious one worked so very well with each other.
Really showed how the AI gang works together well. Love the ending with Fred that’s my fav bit.
Once again brilliant and I can’t wait for the next one, because one more down then smutty.
and when you said working on bedroom scene, i thought yay she’s giving us smut way to raise my hopes LOL just kidding loved it and know how hard this was for you
from Kim

 

Well worth waiting for *sigh* love happy endings.

Can’t get the visual outta my head of what those pants looked like molding to invisible thighs…and stuff *wibble*
Perfect ending to a perfect, fic, Lysa!

 

Yeah!

Love it! Love it! Love it!

Oh how I wish this had happened in the Jossverse. Oh well, the Lysaverse is much more fun and I think I will remain there.

Now, how about a new story? Smut or no smut, it doesn’t matter to me. Your writing is ALL good and wait worthy.

Peace out,

Mel

 

Another great fic to add to your collection Lysa.

I thoroughly enjoyed it, the humour, angst and lovin’, wonderful combination. The image of a naked invisible vampire, getting out of bed, why did he have to be in boxers, waaa…

Looking forward to the next one. I think it’s marvelous you can write fic to order, what a great gift.

 

Wonderful, fabulous job and the fact that it remained smutless to the end is just a testament to your bravery. I’m not even going to mention a smutty epilogue because you’re getting closer to my challenge and I’m not stupid.

I loved the whole flirty bit you had going with Angel and Cordelia slowly realizing it. It seemed a very natural process for them finally getting together.

If you ever have time some day, I’d be interested to see what effect having the Kalderash in Connor’s and Angel’s life would have.

Thanks for a wonderful story!!

 

Lysa –

This was worth the wait…loved the last chapter.

Makes me want to read the whole thing all over again.

You ROCK!

LM

 

Lysa, babe!!

Absolutely fangf**kingtastic!!!

Sheesh, where to start? I loved so much and all of it was outstanding. Cordy outshone everyone but then that’s our Cor, but…. I loved Lorne too and Fred and… the list goes on and everybody in my humble opinion was spot on character wise.

As for Angel, phrwoarrrrr visible or not he got my engine running *wink*. Plus I think I know why this part took so long *grumble* the research must have taken a bloomin age and HUGELY appreciated, loved the little touches with the language; you really brought your gypsy character to life and then some!

Brilliant fic definitely one that’s going to be read and read and blow me but I didn’t miss the lashings of smut either (somebody check my temperature). The little there was was more than enough what with the wonderful fluff and *sigh* pure C/A at its best!

Right done now, except to say “next”!

Hugs and kisses, Helen

 

Lysa

I echo what everyone else has said. This is a marvelous story from start to finish and just goes to prove that smut does not need to always be in a story

Sometimes things are just better left to the imagination, but having said that I did find this fic hot as well!!

Congrats on another truly wonderful fic.

Marie

 

Lysa – Loved it!

You’re lucky you posted – I was just about to stalk for this

Loved all the flirting between Angel and Cordy and then them finally admitting they loved each other.

QUOTE
She was about to point it in Angel’s direction when Gunn stopped her. “Can I do it? I mean, how often can a guy say he’s blasted his ex-boss with a real ray gun?”

QUOTE
Gunn played along and Fred immediately picked up the device. She smirked at both of them. “I’ve got an Invisibility Ray. That is so cool.”

You captured Gunn and Fred so perfectly here. Great last line too.

The whole story was fantastic.

Hugs Becky

WhedonverseandBeyond Forum

Great story! I loved reading it. Okay I wanted to slap the trio (again for like the millionth time).

I think this has to be my favorite quote from this story:

Still giggling, “You’re pretty corny for a vampire.”

“Yeah, I am,” Angel released a short groan. “Wait! Did you say corny?”

Thanks for posting it here Lysa!

 

I loved the story. I just re-read it yesterday and still find it clever, with a great rhythm, and corny enough to make me smile and be happy.

I thought that the characterization was really neat, and even though I like C/A above all, I loved how the rest of the gang was portrayed. Wes and Fred above all else.

The storyline itself was nicely done as well. I don’t think I could have meshed the Kalderash story line with the ones of the Prophecy by the Powers that Be that well, so kudos!

I also loved witnessing the love between the Scoobies and the Ai Team members, they really are family, and I like seeing them working together, it made Sunnydale look cool again to me.

Thank you for posting it, Lysa.

 

Hi Lysa,

Just finished reading ‘Wavelenghts’ . I should say, it was a tad complicated… I got a problem with my explorer yesterday, while reading the first part at ‘GoteamAC’ and when I though ‘Ok! There you go.. a bit Cangel and coffe…’ I couldn’t find the fic due a problem with a storm >.< I’m sure you don’t want to listen, well read to me talking about nasty computers and nastier storms asking for a good something to read (sorry)

What I was trying to say, appart the painfuly ovbius lack of english knowledge, mind you I’m just a cangel spanish girl u_u therefore, sorry if this’ a bit complicated to understand.. or my grammar mistakes for that matter. Also here it just pased two hours since midnight >.< I should be sleeping, but …

I finally found your fic at your personal archive (wow! It’s going to my bookmarks! ^^ so I can read more) and got hooked. Yeah! I could’n stop reading (my coffe got cold.. and for me, that’s something big jajaja) I loved the way you described things, Madame Bosha (Nana Bosha jajaja) and her ‘reading’ to the guys and Fred… Cordy protecting Connor from the Trio… I liked it, because it’s got a serius way arround it, with the possibility of Angel being dead (girl! You got me staring at the screen!) and comical from the way the Trio behaves, to the last scene (that was an excelent way to end it. Loved Fred last sentence jajajaj)  and obviusly a memorable one with Willow and Jonathan ‘catching’ the ‘ray thingie’ xDDD I could easily see that one.

Not sure if the account to feedback works. But it’s worth a try to say: Very good job!! I can’t wait to read more. I liked the way you write, described things and handled the characters personalities.

 

Wow, I wasn’t expecting that! I’ve loved this story from the beginning, ya’ll might know I have a weakness for crossovers. And this one is so well done. The characters sound just right. I’m with everyone else though. Invisible smut please!
More soon!

Anna