K&C: Rapture

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Rapture


WRITTEN in SEPTEMBER 2004
DEDICATED to CALI WHO CLAIMED TO WANT ‘ANYTHING”…LOL


RAPTURE:

Angel’s mouth trailed dewdrop kisses tingling across her skin, cool and wet.
Tongue dipping into nooks and hollows.
His hands slip-sliding over warm curves, cupping and teasing sensitive flesh.
Their bodies moving to the rhythmic cadence of her heartbeat.
On a husky moan, Cordelia’s legs locked around his.
His head snapped up, amber eyes gleaming.
Fingers tangled in the short spikes of his hair, his name fell from her lips,
pleading completion.
Hungrily, he claimed her lips, no longer languidly exploring the soft curves,
but in a needy, carnal kiss.
One wantonly returned as they tumbled on toward ecstasy.

The End.

What are your thoughts about ‘Rapture‘?
Kudos and Critiques are Appreciated. 

CALIFI:

Excellent and hottttt!- but way too short, hmph

Methinks Lysa is taking the piddle


LYSA:

Drabbles are supposed to be 100 words, silly.

CALIFI:

Piddlepiddlepiddlepiddleso nur


TOUTOUNE:

 

Lysa, you are evil!!
*whining voice on* Why did you stop here?? Ok it is a drabble but still a little bit longer would have been so good *whining voice off*.Me think that you are going to be stalked for more; your smutty goodness is addictive. Trust me on that one!!

Val


LYSA:

QUOTE (CalifiST @ Sep 17 2004, 02:55 PM)
Piddlepiddlepiddlepiddle
so nur

*pouts* Hmph! See if I give you anything anytime soon. Hmph! *pouts*

Cali, Gimme *sniff* a break *sniff*on this one.

I wrote it in 10 minutes. All to satisfy your greedy whim for fic.

Now I’m depressed and may drag my muse down with me if you don’t put something on the board soon.


CALIFI:

 

Whatdoya want, Lysa, babes? hugs? here ya go wubs? here ya go

Fic? *runs for the hills screaming*


HELEN:

 

LMAO. Stop arguing you two Wonderful hot and smutty piddle, I ..erm.. meant drabble *blush*

More methinks!

Helen


SUNSCORCHED:

 

By eck Lysa, that was bloody good piddle!!!

Short but very sweet!


DAMNSKIPPY:

 

Lysa, using a huge font and making it bold don’t make it longer. 😉

But for the blink of an eye it took to read, I was drooling.


DIGITRIX:

 

😀 Wayyyyyyy tooooooo short!!!!!!


CALIFI:

Seeseeseeseeseeseesee?Piddle!

make it a puddle (or even a pool/pond/lake/ocean) and I will lick you alllll over


AUTHOR’S NOTE:

This lusty little drabble was eventually incorporated into my fic ‘Red Velvet Ribbon’.


KYRIEANE

 

*ahem* *cough cough* *tap tap* yes, as the queen of the 100 word drabbles…which nonya get to see, this is fabulous! short and hot and puts an incredible image smack dab in the middle of the eyeball viewing screen! kudos and a vigorous golf clap! (ya know, you can do a whole series of 100 word drabbles….kinda like blinks of an event, or a whole fic that way…just sayin)


CORDYNANGEL:

 

Oh Lysa, you so have the gift of smut, lol! You’re fics are so hot and intense, even w/o the actual smut it’s hot! Thank you, keep writing b/c I need more of your delicious words.


KATRINA:

 

Loved this Lysa.

QUOTE
the rhythmic cadence of her heartbeat

Just loved this line, it’s really stuck in my head, so evocative.

HugsKat


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